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You Made It Look Easy


Author: RJCHANDLER
ASL Info:    30/F*GA
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Words: 157
Class/Type: Poetry /Comedy
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You Made It Look Easy



You made it look easy
being a mother of three
For I never Knew
How hard it could be

Now I am a mother
with three of my own
and easy is not
a word I have known

Every day is a new
mountain to climb
getting harder each day
to keep them in line

Sometimes I get crazy
I scream and I yell
Its getting to me
I know you can tell.

My hair’s getting gray
my nerves are all shot
I’m just a kid too
Don’t tell me I’m not.

Where did they come from?
Do they have to stay?
Doesn’t anyone want them?
Just for a day?

If only you’d warned me
If only I had seen
You break a sweat
A Nun I’d have been


But I love these monsters
For I am their mother
just like you love me
and my little brother.




Submitted on 2005-05-19 03:29:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Doesn't anyone want them, just for a day?!

I love reading your stuff because I can relate so completely. I have 3 and I scream and I yell and I wonder what God was thinking giving those poor kids me as a mother and on the other hand what I did to deserve the torture the little monsters put me through.

I tripped a bit on the 2nd stanza... easy is not
a word I have known. I had to back track and read it with the right pause. Not a problem with the writing so much as the reader. I've never been a fan of been as a rhyme for seen, it throws me off. Anyway....

I'll be back to read more... it seems we have a lot in common.
| Posted on 2006-10-18 00:00:00 | by kiddo13 | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah ha... sorry. I like this piece. My mom always tells me that my brother and I weren't easy to raise (only us two kids and I'm the youngest) but I always told her that when I'm older and have a good job and whatnot and find someone that I really love that I want three kids. Two boys and one girl. The look on their faces pretty much are telling me that I'm nuts. Your poem reminds me of that. I really enjoyed this piece. Keep it up!

†Bree†
| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by Destined | [ Reply to This ]
  if i could get away with just one word on this comment it would be:

HALLMARK

HA ha, my mom always wished on me the same troubling kids she felt we were.

"If only you’d warned me
If only I had seen
You break a sweat
A Nun I’d have been"
-^


just fix the flow of this part of the poem and walla

magnifico


you sound happy and with good cheer, any kid would be lucky to have been a part of your life from what i read in your journal, you handled that crisis like a seasoned vet and not a paniked pathetic drama queen more likely to inflict more trauma then already done.

this piece is priceless thanks for shareing it
by mom
paulie d
| Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by paulie d | [ Reply to This ]
  Its a very sweet poem...its not meant to be a technically brilliant poem (neither or mine) its just a really heartfel piece. I guess its just expressing your love for your kids despite the difficulty fo raising them at times...im one in four in my family the eldest...i know what my mum has to put up with at times and it is an awful lot, but she has always been there to offer her love...and we do appreciate it even if at times we have not always shown it..yeh well anyway love, luck and happiness to you and your family :)
| Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by riverseo | [ Reply to This ]


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