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    dots Submission Name: Coal and Crystal Eyesdots

    Author: riverseo
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Belfast
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 24/34/13
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I'm not entirely sure of what to make of this poem myself...its about how clearly (or how unclearly) we view things in life..i suppose its led to quite a confused poem..very little is crystal clear, and we only ever hear half truths at times....ahh well again some thoughts would be appreciated whether it be criticism or just general thoughts on what the poem means.....hope you enjoy :)

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    dotsCoal and Crystal Eyesdots

    Bells tolling on sunshiny days
    Uninvited night descends on bright pleasures
    Taking little steps and little measures
    To avoid dark paths that stalk in the light
    Dead embers that burn hazily in coal eyes

    Home truths extinct in explosive lies
    Right and left given as directionless directions
    Spotting ash in frozen time’s imperfections
    The nuances of a blank stare
    Reflected in a mirror seen by crystal eyes

    The burnt out torch in the fog
    Pale drops trickle down desperate brows
    Heated debate and confused illogical rows
    Mists choke the clear blue sky
    Opaque, obscure is the meaning of life beyond our eyes.

    Submitted on 2005-05-19 07:34:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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