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    dots Submission Name: Can You Feel It?dots

    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 670
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    dotsCan You Feel It?dots

    Can you feel my love,
    it's so strong?
    Can you feel it in your heart,
    Like a spear I drove through it?

    Do you feel the blood dripping,
    like it's never gonna stop?
    Do you feel the pain of heartache,
    that I bore into you?

    Are you feeling the wounds,
    of me etching my name into your heart?
    Can you feel my love,
    so deep?

    Can you truely feel me,
    inside your heart?
    Do you like this pain,
    that I have placed upon you?

    Feel it. Feel me.
    I want you to know all of this pain,
    all of the pain that you have inflicted upon me.

    Can you feel it?
    Are you feeling overwhelmed,
    by all of this love and all of this pain?

    Remember it,
    because this is what you have done to my heart.
    I want you to feel my pain, really feel it,
    everytime you think of me.

    Because, like you in mine,
    I'll forever live deep in your wounded heart...

    Submitted on 2005-05-19 09:14:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow you have written that with such passionate and your words are very powerful...i really like it the way it is but as a suggestion...i think that it has potential to be even better..if you looked at some of the wording..i think perhaps you could make this sound almost like something from shakespeare...keep writing :)
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]

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