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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 874
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    His hands, so strong,
    pulled me close.
    Closer than I should have been.
    I can't fight it, I want it.

    Those beautiful hands,
    gently touched me where no one has.
    His hands, they touched my heart.

    My love is now laying,
    in the palms of his these hands.
    The hands that once protected me,
    now expose me, hold me,
    Open, vulnerable to his grasp.

    Does he know that he holds the key to my soul,
    to my everything?
    Will his hands let go,
    let my heart be free?

    Or will he forever hold it,
    in the palms of his hands,
    ...exposed.




    Submitted on 2005-05-19 17:11:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this blew me away. I really liked the imagry with the hands. As archie said, I think guys sometimes dont understand the sensitivity of our hearts and feelings as we do as women. I can totally relate to how this message is displayed. Thanks for a great read!
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by Peachpitt | [ Reply to This ]
      Great job I cant relate to this really
    but well written
    I felt like I was there almost
    alot of feeling
    just keep it up
    youare an excellent writer
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by acapone | [ Reply to This ]
      I am a guy so this is a little creepy for me, it pulls accross a perspective that is different from mine and it is rather cool to see it. The poem worked well done
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by ARCHIE | [ Reply to This ]
      this connects with me so much right now. i love it really. it really shows how he captures your heart and how he like holds it. i really liked 'Those beautiful hands,
    gently touched me where no one has.
    His hands, they touched my heart.' it completely reminds me and my first heartbreak. its conveys a message that everyone wants to get out at one point in their life in a very original way.
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by FromBlindToBlue | [ Reply to This ]


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