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    dots Submission Name: Bloomdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 7
    Class/Type: Haiku/Happy
    Total Views: 565
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       Just another attempt at a haiku. The sun came out briefly this afternoon to brighten up the day!!!

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    Lotus flowerz
    innocent bloom self
    blessed petals

    Submitted on 2005-05-19 18:05:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Short, simple and straight to the point.
    You must be a woman of few wordz.

    It is wonderful and very descriptive.
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by Unicrom | [ Reply to This ]
      This isn't a haiku it's an epiphaku :) so there :)...I like the imagery that was evoked for a spring->summer day :) (well, if you're in Cal then it's a rochester summer :P )

    Muy Bien!

    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by Stwcjj | [ Reply to This ]
      This isn't even a haiku. This structure is 4:5:4. It is supposed to be 5:7:5. So, as a haiku, this is terrible, but I do like its meaning. If you want to keep this as a haiku, you could restructure it a bit, but otherwise, this is nothing more than a quote.
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by Bijou de Mort | [ Reply to This ]
      ooooooooh, pretty pretty haiku. sorry, i had to. i love haiku because you can say so much in so little and you did a marvelous job in doing just that.
    -the wildchild
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]

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