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    dots Submission Name: Here We Are, All Alone Babydots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 703
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    dotsHere We Are, All Alone Babydots

    Here we are all alone
    You and me,
    In the backseat of the car
    And we can do anything
    Your fantasy
    I wanna make your dream come true
    I wanna hear you scream my name
    Maybe Iíll do the same.

    I love the way your body feels
    On top of mine so take your time
    We got all night.

    We can go back home
    On the patio we can make a night you won't forget.
    We can do it in your parents room
    we just can't leave any evidence behind
    I like it slow
    and I know you like it too
    we get going
    don't stop
    I feel it now You feel it too
    You're toes curl
    you put me close to you
    Just let it flow
    you have no other place to go.

    Three postion down 365 more to go.
    we have a long nite ahead of us.
    so be ready to keep your legs the seprate ways.

    Submitted on 2005-05-19 19:30:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      haha i like this is was about two people living in the moment just letting all their desires come out.

    On the patio we can make a night you won't forget.
    We can do it in your parents room
    we just can't leave any evidence behind.

    that was my fav. line it shows that you dont care where as long as it please's her.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      well that was kinda sick, but its you, there was a few spelling errors but those are easy fixes and now i agree with my earlier post, you are boderline obssessed. you sicko, i don't wanna know about how you do your girlfriend but i can't say that i haven't written nasty poems either but there is a big diff, because mine are to be funny when yours are real, and i hope you people are safe!
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      this was... intresting. sorry but i don't usally read this kind of stuff. the flow was pretty good, just keep on writing.

    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]

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