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    dots Submission Name: Lead me Homedots
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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsLead me Homedots
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    Pastel painted sunsets
    blur the evening sky
    lifting saddened spirits
    drifting sparrows fly
    beckoning the batsong
    of the coming dusk
    singing frog lone lovesongs
    lead me home
    I trust




    Submitted on 2005-05-20 04:43:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good work Archie

    Little poems like this, in my opinion, need to create one, simple image. You've done exactly that. It's evening, it's beautiful and you'll soon be home.

    Simple. Concise. You've communicated the view, the sounds and most importantly the emotion of the moment.

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    Steve
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]


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