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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsWhere?dots
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    Where is the reason?
    where is the rhyme?
    where are the questions that pass the time?
    where have they gone to?
    will they come back?
    keeping me solid
    on the right track.

    Butterflys catch breeze blown pollened blossoms
    as the twitching trees sigh love songs
    to
    themselves
    answering the questions that they are.




    Submitted on 2005-05-20 04:44:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was pretty good, the first line reminded me of the Phantom Tollbooth a little...The first verse I really liked...the one that began with "Butterflies catch the breeze"...not so much..
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmmmmm...Its sounds a bit familiar. But It is also good. I enjoyed reading it. Keep up the excellent work! The only thing i wasnt "hot on" was the verse that starts with butterflys
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by poeticeyes | [ Reply to This ]


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