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    dots Submission Name: Himdots
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    Author: SouthrnQT
    ASL Info:    24/ Female/ Florida
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 290/271/31
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
    Total Views: 1251
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    Description:
       I can't even express myself anymore, this man has me so smitten, so engulfed in happiness that Its even hard to think. No matter what anyone thinks of this poem, it's meant for only one. It's from the heart.


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    dotsHimdots
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    Out of nowhere
    There he was
    Far more than a knight in shining armor
    Even more than the man of my dreams

    Miles away, yet still so close
    He's made residence in my heart
    Slipped inside my world, my soul
    A delicious uproar, cracking the walls that have held me strong

    How did this happen?
    How could this be?
    Just when I wasn't paying any attention
    A splash in the serene waters
    He causes waves, a whirlpool of laughter
    Hurricanes to smiles

    It began as a simple post
    How amazing he writes
    Pouring his heart, his being into words
    I was enraptured by his depth
    An inspiration became more

    These feelings shout from my eyes
    He knows me...
    Miracles exist
    Thank you for the smiles
    For giving me hope again
    Showing me that God may have a deeper destiny for me...

    A destiny that awaits in your arms




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      He's made residence in my heart.

    I think that line says it all, and after talking to you, I know this is how you felt about him. Just reading this, and knowing how you feel now really drives into the heart of it all.

    This poem shouts of you, and it's a sweet calling card to how you wanted to express your feelings for this person. I guess all I can say to you is, remember the happy moments and try to read this when you can. You'll be happy again one day.

    Grey
    | Posted on 2006-02-06 00:00:00 | by Greyson | [ Reply to This ]
      Its great that you were able to feel this way. I must admit, I'm jealous, lol.i hope you keep felling this happiness. good poem for making it personal
    //miss//
    | Posted on 2005-08-19 00:00:00 | by Its All A Lie | [ Reply to This ]
      this was really good. even though it is hard to express your feelings i think that you did a beautiful job in putting it into this. It had great feeling.. i think your very happy indeed. He's a lucky guy ;)
    -joy
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      I know he'll think the same when he reads this. it is a great piece. it has great images and beautifally writen. great job lia
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really a great write and I know he'll think the same. Your descriptions flow so well, but I often find that when I'm on a high of emotion, so is my writing.
    It's also great to see that some do meet great ppl on the net, and that some relationships do work. My brother is marrying his chat friend this summer. So more power to you.
    jan
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Very wonderful. In particular I loved the imagery of - "He's made residence in my heart". That says so much with such simple beauty. Whoever he is I hope he knows how lucky he is to have you. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work!
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by rankamateur | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a lovely piece. you've done a good job portraying your emotions, they seemed to have jumped out at me while i was reading. there's also some very pretty images. ~so how does it feel to be so smitten?~
    good luck with your writings and this guy, whoever he is.
    -the wildchild
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by wildchild | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, beautiful writing, beautiful images...sounds like you've got it bad! i don't know who this guy is, but it sounds like what you're feeling, what you're experiencing, is almost overwhelming. how many people want to experience that kind of connection? everyone. whoever he is, he's blessed.
    | Posted on 2005-05-20 00:00:00 | by treybur | [ Reply to This ]
      nice.nice. . . i have stoped reading romantic poerty after i broke a 2yr relationship with my boyfriend. so the reason y i started again is because like you i've had a really special guy suddenly walk into my life and i can so relate when you say "Just when I wasn't paying any attention" it's kinda beautiful that way because it's almost like love came looking for you just when you stoped searching for it . . . .go and fulfil ur destiny
    Keep spreading the love
    Nadia*
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by AfricanPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      oooh nice i like it. remember the feeling, being so (to use your word) smitten by some guy. *usher singing in the background: "you got it you got it bad"* sorry (giggles) you had some really nice imagery in here, the whole "serene waters" and the like. i love the last line "a destiny that awaits in your arms". that is just so beautiful. lucky guy. ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~Tayla~
    | Posted on 2005-08-22 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]


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