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    dots Submission Name: Found Lovedots
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    Author: Isaac
    ASL Info:    30/M/Albuquerque
    Elite Ratio:    5.53 - 139/122/28
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 296
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 970



    Description:
       I wrote a 5 minute piece last night. A member of this site was dissatisfied by the amount of time I spent on it. So I put about 1 hour into this! I love love and what it can do and does to people! Hope you, reader, are in love or find love soon! Cheers!
    P.S. I'd love any ideas on this open ended subject!


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    dotsFound Lovedots
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    Something happened to me last night,
    Something I cannot explain.
    I love the way it made me feel,
    It’s something I can’t wait to feel again.

    She held my hand closed in hers,
    Holding it just over her heart…
    She said, “I feel you deep in here,
    I would die if we ever were to part.”

    Her eyes lit up looking into mine,
    Our smiles began to grow.
    As our lips gently moved toward each other,
    She whispered, “I love you so.”

    Her words, her lips... all her essence,
    Pressed against my soul…
    My senses, my passion... my very being,
    Surrendered to hate’s more powerful foe.

    What this precious angel left me with,
    Every other girl could not bring to me,
    That night… that beautiful night…
    The night my soul, my love… were finally set free.

    She… my soul mate, my hero… the only one for me.




    Submitted on 2005-05-20 19:16:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      And you said I was hopeless romantic. (well I am... but still...) I love this piece! It seems to be so... ahh cute. (it's the best word I could think of) It's true, each of us will find our love. Maybe in this life time or the next. (if this is just a poem or that of real feelings) Great job! Lol, sorry I can't stop thinking about the poem now. Keep it up!

    †Bree†
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by Destined | [ Reply to This ]
      Aww this is so romantic. :) The first stanza wasn't as powerful as the rest. That's the only suggestion I have for this piece. I think you did a great job expressing your emotions without it sounding cliché. I'm really liking love poems now-a-days. :) Great job. My favorite part,
    "My senses, my passion... my very being,
    Surrendered to hate’s more powerful foe."
    Great way to say that. :)
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]



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