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    dots Submission Name: pressuredots
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    Author: andnow
    ASL Info:    19.f.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.57 - 136/135/42
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 573
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    Bytes: 726



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    dotspressuredots
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    Standing in the center of a ring
    relied on for her consistency
    ability to keep it bottled for so long
    so long, so long.

    Separating feelings
    for fear of disappointment
    the cage can only hold the tiger for so long
    so long, so long

    faces upon faces upon faces upon faces
    watching in anticipation
    excitement in seeing another fall down
    laugh happy laugh

    Its only when the lights go out
    shine off this glad faced girl
    the one they never expected
    crashing crashing

    a tear to break the mold
    a sob to crack the ice
    a feeling to shatter the glass
    pressure pushes all




    Submitted on 2005-05-21 01:45:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this poem.

    I really ejoyed the first and last stanzas. They were the best. They really made it good. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by Blindly-N-Love | [ Reply to This ]
      This sounds very much like a Linkin Park song. But don't take that as an insult, I admire the amount of personality within it.
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by gavinspikenard | [ Reply to This ]
      "a tear to break the mold
    a sob to crack the ice
    a feeling to shatter the glass
    pressure pushes all"..this adds such a delicate touch to the entire poem that it's simply amazing. I loved it.
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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