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    dots Submission Name: Not Knowingdots
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    Author: punk_rock_chick
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 7/12/4
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
    Total Views: 724
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    Bytes: 376



    Description:
       TRUTH!!!


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    dotsNot Knowingdots
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    This pain creeping up a dark hallway,
    This person following it,
    Step by step it comes slowly up the hallway,
    What's this person here to do,
    Hurt me,
    Kill me,
    Or just to tourture me,
    I fall in to a deep sleep,
    To wake up in a coffin,
    People all around me,
    Now knowing what that person was there to do.




    Submitted on 2005-05-21 12:31:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think it sounds good the way it is. I like the word useage and it sounds like a hidden message. Thanks for sharing though.
    ~Darlene
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by FallenAngle2005 | [ Reply to This ]
      This started off really well but I didn't really like the ending. That's just my thing though, others'll probally like it a lot.
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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