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    dots Submission Name: Take medots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
    Total Views: 640
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    Bytes: 1074

       I know there is alot of repetion in this piece. It sounds better when you put the gutiar to it. please comment.

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    dotsTake medots

    Take me!
    And let me into the heavens above.
    Take me away from this place I hate so much!
    So take me
    don't shut me out!
    As the days go bye my heart grows colder and colder.
    so take me!

    My soul is in a coma
    no one can tell
    I'm drowning in my own blood
    So take me
    Take me!
    Looking around I don't know what way to go
    My life is spinning out of control.
    Take me!

    Take me
    don't shut me out.
    I know you hear me from the heavens!
    Take me!
    Take me away from this place I hate so much!

    These thought of death won't go away in till you
    Take me away.
    These voices are telling me to take my own life
    but Iím waiting for you to take me.
    Take me
    Take me away
    Can't you see that my heart grows colder with each day of the rising of the sun and the setting of the moon.
    Take me away!
    Far, far away.
    To a place that I will love.

    Submitted on 2005-05-21 17:01:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww, I really do like this. I loved the ending of it...
    Take me away
    far, far away
    to a place that I will love.

    This poem reminds me of how I use to feel all the time...and still do sometimes. I hope you get through this.
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      so here is what i get from this you hate life so much and aftr a few failed suicide attempts you just want god to take you away from all that you hate.am i right?if not sorry but i really like this one.it shows alot of emotion
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this a lot but it sounds like a sound they play on razor and i can't think of the name write now but they sound a lot a like and some of the lines are exactly the same so were you listening to that when you wrote this?but other then that it is really good, no spelling errors and the flow is with it from the start to finish and my fav lines are
    "My soul is in a coma
    no one can tell
    I'm drowning in my own blood
    So take me
    Take me!
    Looking around I don't know what way to go
    My life is spinning out of control.
    Take me!"
    just because it reminds me of feeling so much pain that you just want it to all end or just go numb.
    | Posted on 2005-05-22 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      this is very repetitive like u said! but its really good! i like when u say ur drowning in ur own blood! this was good! i wish i could here this on the guitar!
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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