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    dots Submission Name: Messiah Girldots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMessiah Girldots
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    The messiah girl Melissa came to this place with love.
    She walked through villages of the philosophical poor.
    The world refused to pay attention because there was no budget for her ideas.
    Perhaps it was just a girl thing.
    She exposed her heart but not her flesh.
    Miracles are no match for media marvels.
    In an urban desert she tried to rise through days of trial.
    This savior girl was tempted and victorious but still unnoticed.
    She taught the thought that temporal beauty is transient at best and frequently pretty stupid.
    Was messiah girl ignored because she kept her radiance so neatly tucked in?
    Would enlightened boy Bob have the same problem?
    She surrendered to obscurity then took a new name and occupation.
    She may live near you, but you will never know because you didn't notice when she did.




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      oh my, I really liked this one..madame..:D
    The soiled pipers will never shine their midnight flashlights on the hearts of such perfect creatures, they violently stampede around all these marvels without a care in the world, they can't process such gorgeous concepts as mind over body, these fundamental things, a grand knowledge of love is raped and pulled apart to pick away the rest of the thrashed meat from these carnivor's teeth...like some sick nightmare, they storm in and cut the god out of each smile without even flinching for a single second...some of us will continue to try to change this, some of us will try to find this savior girl, try to push her back in front of the crowd, give her an altar and a few million serious ears to bring peace and harmony to.
    great read, friend.
    | Posted on 2005-07-13 00:00:00 | by Reckoner | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo, Penny always seems to beat me to the comments...I think she can read my mind; she always say's what I was thinking lol, and I don't like to add a comment when I've really got nothing new to add. But I'm shying away from that for a moment. This was absolutely wonderful. And so true. (Insert pretty much everything Penny said here) Great write, brilliant read. I look forward to seeing more. Be well
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this... and I sensed some bitterness as well. The title attracted me, because as you obviously know, there have been no messiahs who were women.

    'Would enlightened boy Bob have the same problem? '
    I feel like this line represents it. Yeah, like anyone would take a female saviour seriously. Look thru history and the only thing women have been really really good at is look beautiful.

    It's modern day, and still young women believe they have to act and feel a certain way to be deemed attractive to the opposite sex.

    'She exposed her heart but not her flesh.'
    I love this line, it's my absolute favourite.
    'No budget for her ideas'...true, so very true..
    I can't quote any more excerpts because they are all excellent. Thanks for such a thought provoking read. especially as I was thinking about this topic just recently. I love your writing.
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, i love how you find the understory in these ideas, and I remember seeing this or a version of it at the other workshop. I think all women are goddesses, it's not just my orientation,
    to breathe in beauty and exhale love, it's the truth. There is a divine glow about the feminine and while beauty is in the eye of the beholder those looking will not see magic unless they believe.

    I love your work too so I hope you don't get tired of my reflecting you this way. thanks beauty!
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-06-20 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]


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