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    dots Submission Name: Its Easier to Frowndots
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    Author: inkonspikuous
    ASL Info:    21/f/va
    Elite Ratio:    5.94 - 76/74/26
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 254
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 743



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       Truly tell me what you think. State of mind? um, read the poem it pretty much tells it all.


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    dotsIts Easier to Frowndots
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    All my sunny days lead to dark nights,
    and all my happy conversations get replayed
    until they become monologues.
    When I smile its only because
    I've found more words
    to accomodate my sadness
    thats been planted in
    my make-shift grave called life.
    My last nerve is holding the nails to my coffin,
    and I'm no sure how much longer I can keep smiling.
    A coffin made of poetry isn't made
    to carry the weight of the world.
    Silly me thinking stupid words
    could pick up the slack,
    without an interpreter
    they can barely relay a message.
    Can I stand on metaphors?
    Should I put my soul
    in the hands of oxymorons?




    Submitted on 2005-05-21 21:54:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      More more more........
    you left a cliffhanger xP
    I like your words and like what you say (not in a good way I just understand the feelings)

    I can't fault this really, maybe the punctuation?
    I didn't read it as it was written but I'm just wierd.

    I didn't understand the "nails in my coffin" line perfectly and you missed a t out of not lol.

    But even when disparaged you have a great imagination with words.
    I commend you greatly
    | Posted on 2007-01-30 00:00:00 | by Localfreak | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice poem. Ofcourse depressing but good. Dead was something I thought about every second of the day and I once lost it being depressed stopped talkin to people did drugs heavily left college and tried to kill myself. I'm more than fine now that I met my girl and I' back in college. I liked the way this poem was worded and it flowed good. Keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-05-21 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]


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