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    dots Submission Name: Demons in my Minddots
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    Author: Kitty
    ASL Info:    14/F/Vermont
    Elite Ratio:    2.51 - 23/29/12
    Words: 273
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsDemons in my Minddots
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    Hell's bells are ringing for me
    Hell's angels are singing for me
    Hold my hand tight
    Promise it will end all right

    There were always demons in my mind
    They were never hard to find
    Never far away fom me
    I know it's hard for you to see
    But just try to understand
    This is never what I had planned

    Hell's bells are ringing for me
    Hell's angels are singing for me
    Hold my hand tight
    Promise it will end all right

    Forgive me just this one last time
    This has reason and this has rhyme
    Kiss my mouth hard
    Don't forget my heart was scarred
    Breathe with me my last breath
    I'm fading in the clammy hands of death

    Hell's bells are ringing for me
    Hell's angels are singing for me
    Hold my hand tight
    Promise it will end all right

    And as the knife goes to my wrist
    It's only God that I have missed
    I lost myself long ago
    And over my body a river does flow
    Of pain and tears and blood and shame
    It's only I that can be blamed

    Hell's bells are ringing for me
    Hell's angels are singing for me
    Hold my hand tight
    Promise it will end all right

    I can't be fixed when I'm this broken
    Many times the Devil has spoken
    Whisper words in my ear
    So that only I may hear
    Sing to me one last song
    I do not have very long

    Hell's bells are ringing for me
    Hell's angels are singing for me
    Hold my hand tight
    Promise it will end all....




    Submitted on 2005-05-22 11:05:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      great poem alot for me to relate to
    my style is similar but shorter poems
    Kiss my mouth hard was my least fav.
    line
    but great
    | Posted on 2005-05-22 00:00:00 | by acapone | [ Reply to This ]


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