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    dots Submission Name: Mistressdots
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    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 302
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1091



    Description:
       Yeah, uh, this isn't really a poem, its more of a letter to an old friend. but anyway. I don't usually post these kind of things, but I guess I could see the feedback I get.


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    dotsMistressdots
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    I long for you once more, my mistress
    I crave the pain you gave me.
    I remember all of our games baby. I miss you
    The way you chained me up, and blindfolded me
    I would fear nothing, for I was in your control.
    Great was the trust I could manifest in you.
    Seeing nothing but blackness,
    and feeling nothing but your torture.
    Oh, Emily, give suspence to the moment,
    Make me beg for your sweet touch.
    Biting hard onto this ball-gag,
    As you whip me with your belt.
    Oh, my dark mistress,
    I crave the rush i'd get when youd cut me,
    Break my skin with your blades.
    I miss the tickle of blood running down my side.
    I miss you, You would take away all the pain
    she caused me to cry, and youd heal my wounds.
    After all my begging, just to hold you close,
    All I want is to feel your warmth.
    You release me from your chains and shackles
    And I finally feel your beautiful body next to mine
    And I'd wake up with you in my arms.





    Submitted on 2005-05-22 15:16:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow. nice poem. so what happened to her? damn. in all the things i read you lost someone... did you lose her too? that would suck! anyways, chains huh? cool. and blindfolds too? coll. ha ha nice work... keep it up. i hope to read more by you later
    love tina
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by ladiesplanet1 | [ Reply to This ]
      well...this could be an featured on an episode of HBO's real sex. You really decided not to leave it to our imaginations.

    In your poem you refer to the main actor as your mistress, only reveling her name in Line 9, but not before and not again. This would have
    worked with you telling us her name. It just wasn't needed.

    The fact that you could still have such a romantic morning after after a night that wild shows that indeed you had something rare and special. i would have written a poem too ha ha.

    Demetrius
    | Posted on 2005-05-22 00:00:00 | by demetriusandrew | [ Reply to This ]
      wow... well umm... wow, lol i dont know what to say. i love it thats for sure... but than again i usually love everything you write. and i like what you wrote here whether its a poem or more of a letter. its still great. good job hun keep it up ttyl...Joy
    | Posted on 2005-05-22 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]



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