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Submission Name: Sweet dreams dots

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Author:	Destined
ASL Info:	17/f/wisconsin
Elite Ratio:	5.29 - 86/68/17
Words:	113

Class/Type:	Poetry/Depressed
Total Views:	237
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	700

Description:
After tears being shed as for unknown reasons... to tears being shed as to, who am I? This poem came out.

Are tears really alright to shed? For even the most strongest person cries. I guess... to some, I can't cry nor let anyone near my heart again. I must become that of stone. Alone.

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Sweet dreams dots

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What’s the worst that I can say?
Does it really matter if I stay?
So long and good night,
Sweet dreams and sleep tight.

I really wish that I could go
End my melancholy, end my woes.
So long and good night,
Sweet dreams and sleep tight.

When every star falls, it brings you to tears,
Leave my name out of your prayers.
So long and good night,
Sweet dreams and sleep tight.

Forever I will sleep,
In a hole that's six foot deep.
My last words that I will say,
Does it really matter if I stay?

So long and good night,
Sweet dreams and sleep tight.

Submitted on 2005-05-22 22:50:57 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well I feel ya on this one, believe me on that. I thought this was really good, dark, negative and sad but good job on openning up your feelings and writting them down. I do all the time. The words where put perfectly into order to tell a short story and reveil a deep tear of lost hope. Past the depressing point, which I feel most of the time as well, this was good. Keep writting your feelings down, the'yr the best poems cause their the realest.
| Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
  wow nanana that is really good and it is really sad, you know now that you always have me to talk to when you are down? because i'm here for you, other then that there was one place that i stumbled when i was reading and that was
"When every star falls brought you to tears,"
I believ if you chage this to something like
"When every a star falls it brings you to tears"
i think that would make it easier to read because the first time i read it i had to stop and was thinking shouldn't there be an a in there and then it didn't make sence but you know.
I wuv ya nananana
~liz~
| Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
  Death seems like such a harsh ending to an existance. 'Does it really matter if I stay?' That was perfect. I think that is the question that is asked in the minds of all. The world sometimes seems as if it would be the same whether we are here or not, but in reality, it wouldn't be, now would it. Every individual gives something special to the meaning of life, this piece makes us realize that. A very beautiful read. Thank you for sharing it.
Crystal
| Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by lenotoire | [ Reply to This ]
  its weird how when we feel down..and we think about serious things we tend to trivialize them..."nothing really matters"...its actually almost become apart of my daily routine. i like the line "I really wish I could go"..because while we trivialize it there is always that something there..that almost makes it seem as though we want to extend our misery its become apart of us...being that death is so final..so unknown. Good Write. Keep Writing.
| Posted on 2005-05-22 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]
  I hope you truly don't become "Faded Light." I know emotions usually come on strong through and an immediate reaction is not the outcome. But standing in isolation and can't find a way... it's like... everything's gone. But hope exsists! As to the write... powerful emotions... your description was equally as powerful. A heart of stone huh... well...lol... remember that even some stones are precious and beautiful... they just need to be cut to really see their beauty; of which I believe is inside of you from reading other works of yours and your PMs! None the less... I say cheers to this write!
| Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Isaac | [ Reply to This ]

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