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    dots Submission Name: At Faultdots

    Author: shombray
    ASL Info:    18/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 103/91/26
    Words: 369
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Men cheat too but women also have thier share of fun.It is not right to commit this sin but it's temptation steadily calls some of us.Sometimes we can be so worried about our lovers that we need to worry about our own oordeals. This is why some relationships fail.

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    He was supposed to take her out somewhere
    His excuse is that he's too busy .She thinks he doesn't care.
    She calls him to ease her troubled mind
    Wishing to hear his voice on the other line
    But all she hears is the ringtone
    Leting her know that knowone is at home.
    Now he stops holding her hand
    She feels that he is not her man
    She feels like they are buddies
    His kisses use to be warm and real
    And now his lips she rarely feels
    She thinks that her heart is braking
    He can talk to everyone else
    But when it comes to her she is by her self trying to find someone to talk to.
    And now her brain is so tired
    Her emotions are too wired
    She is ready to confront him.
    She goes to his house and bangs on the door
    Her fragile heart can't take no more.
    He opens the door and tries to calm her down
    Tears are rolling down her face that is a frown
    She asks if he is cheating on her
    He says no and that is absurd
    But he needs to tell her something.
    He says he knows what she has been up to
    He didn't want to believe it was true
    But his eyes have seen it all
    He said he tried to talk to her but she's always busy
    He tried to show affection but she has pushed away lately
    He said that they were supposed to go to the movies earlier that night
    But she did not come to his house.He felt that something was not right.
    As he drived to her house and called her cellphone
    All he could hear was her ringtone.So he turned his phone off.
    He decided to go to her room to see if she was there
    But as he slowly opens the door she is having sex with another man
    It was more than his heart could bear.
    And know he is looking at her with the worsest stare.
    Then he says it is over and slams the door in her face
    Now she is alone with no man to embrace.

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      this one almost brings tears to my eyes it has great imagry and a really good plot its one of those thats nice to think about but not good to think to long on if you get my meaning
    | Posted on 2005-05-28 00:00:00 | by darkonesgirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really good. I didn't excpect the twist at the end it baffled me. IT 's seems like a plog of a story.well i don't know what elset o say. hope to hear from you.
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]
      I read this one and the other piece you posted today. you tell a story ... it could be real or false, but i think if you did not tell exactly but cut it up a little more to leave more ... i would enjoy them better. just me though, keep writing!
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]

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