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    dots Submission Name: wasted memoriesdots
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    Author: XxMusikJunkiexX
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 109/134/39
    Words: 382
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 617
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    Description:
       for a friend.


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    dotswasted memoriesdots
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    He sings along with his lonely guitar,
    Haunting melodies laced with a hint of light,
    And he's found that he's spoken all the words he's got left,
    But he still can't manage to understand this life,
    Through smoky eyes he can see the world,
    But the world he once worshipped has changed with the music,
    And he finds himself longing for the blazing nights of summer,
    When he wasn't so broken and they weren't so blinded,
    The sky doesn't glitter in the way that it used to,
    And he's not sure if he ever believed in the Angels,
    In their eyes he sees misery that God himself's overlooked,
    And he's sorry but doubts that he's got the power to save them,
    Sometimes he can't help it but smile,
    Because pain doesn't always result in tears,
    And he's found that there's really no such thing as closure,
    'cause it only gets harder to move on through the years,
    One more moment of calm is all that he wants,
    One more afternoon at the beach where everything's alright,
    'cause the salt air's better than any drug he can think of,
    Still, he'd trade it all in just to feel alive,
    Love, and booze, and rock and roll,
    He wonders why pain has always tasted so sweet,
    And if he could he'd abandon this feeling tonight,
    But the deeper the scars the more pain to bleed,
    He trembles as he tries to remember,
    He can feel the warmth fill his lungs with its promise,
    And for once he's certain that things will turn out okay,
    And for once he's certain that he will get some rest,
    He whispers a prayer to the God he's forgotten,
    Electric sunrise fills his head with heat,
    Who knew fire could be so liberating?
    Who knew fire would finally make him complete?
    He closes his eyes as he falls to the floor,
    Counts his breath as he slowly begins to surrender,
    And the walls begin melting as the sky opens up,
    All he wants is to make this peace last forever,
    He breathes as the world collapses in on itself,
    But he doesn't care as long as his ocean stays calm,
    He watches as the smoke begins to color his mind,
    Just a kid who's finally found his way home...




    Submitted on 2005-05-23 06:02:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanx for your comments on continues it continues from the post before it twins if you get a chance read that to
    i liked this post you submitted
    people finding people within themselves kind of takes me back to my childhood many years ago
    great write and enjoyable read
    thanx again
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-06-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      this was beautiful, there was so much emotion displayed in it, and it portrayed good imagery. in a way it reminded me of someone. one of my friends, i think. if i were you , i wouldn't change anything. this is well written, and changing anything would ruin it. great job.
    ~kriss
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, i could tell you put alot of feeling into this. It was heartwreching with so many feelings, but in the end you got a sence of release that it will all be okay. I wouldnt change a thing...
    its amazing how you could somehow bring all those feelings into words, a hard accomplishment...but you pulled it off beautifully.
    -jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]


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