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beyond the boundaries of.


Author: wilted_
ASL Info:    20/f/singapore
Elite Ratio:    5.22 - 138 /110 /29
Words: 123
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Description:


tell me what you can interpret from this. thanks.


beyond the boundaries of.



on the distant right,
digressing from the beaten track,
your route meanders abruptly
to the left
and back -
only to fixate upon
the direction of
one

immersed in madness,
you drip dry with remnants of
newly-recovered
rationality.

they cannot tune in to
broadcasted waves of your
unsettled consciousness.
likewise,

you are unable to fathom why
the unknowing ones
do not sought the kind of
death
that transcends
what even Dowson believed as
temporal.

misunderstood by the masses,
you seek solace
and euphoria
in the obliging voices that
echo within the shifting walls
of your mind
which was left
unhearing
and
unseeing

to the spoken words
of man
and their
motives.




Submitted on 2005-05-23 07:56:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  There seems to be a lot of protest in lurking within this poem, bubbling near the surface. Certainly the is unrest. This is for sure a very thought-provoking piece of poetry.

I have to agree though, maybe a couple of less paragraphs would even improve this. As it stands though it's still better than anything i could come up with. well done.
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Senna27NZ | [ Reply to This ]
  Well the metaphors and wording is absolutly beaitiful and i love the imagry, but you seem to be a little pharagraph happy, you put in returns a little to often, i think it would flow better and be easyer to read if you condensed some of the lines, but over all i liked it a lot, my favorite part was
on the distant right,
digressing from the beaten track,
your route meanders abruptly
to the left
and back -
THe rest of the stansa could use a little work but i liked it all the same!
~Shadow
P.s thank you for reading "the path to individuality"! Your advice is always welcome. (your pic is awsome!)
| Posted on 2005-12-06 00:00:00 | by Moonshadow | [ Reply to This ]
  This was very dark. I don't know if it sounds political or more of a battle with another and an inner battle within yourself?! Maybe I'm wrong? I don't know. Other then the confusion of what the meaning is...this was really interesting!

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  This sounds very political to me...Sounds like a political piece somehow to me but then again, maybe not. Maybe I'm just crazy. The distant right-back to the left whole thing gave me that idea.

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| Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]


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