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    dots Submission Name: Life Sucks, Then Ya Die!dots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 796
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    Bytes: 827



    Description:
       Yeah, the title says it all!


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    dotsLife Sucks, Then Ya Die!dots
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    OCD, ADD,
    An STD, just one.
    Anxiety, Depression,
    This life is so much fun!

    Stressful days, sleepless nights,
    A job that really sucks.
    A single mom, without a friend,
    No social life, no luck!

    Whining kids, a messy house,
    No time to wash my hair.
    Tom and Jerry all day long,
    Oh God, I need a beer!

    Under-eye bags, broken nails,
    No time to shave my legs.
    The only way to get a guy,
    Is after he pounds a keg!

    Flirtatious and seductive,
    Big boobs that turned some heads.
    Many drunken pick-up lines,
    To get me in their beds!

    Goodbye to Mrs. Sexy,
    Hello to Mrs. Mom.
    No more one-night stands for me,
    And that's my sad, sad song!




    Submitted on 2005-05-23 08:59:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love it! You can definately say a lot in so few words. Though it seems like the poetry a middle school boy would write to get kicked out of lit. Any way I havent found that many comedy poems on this site but this is my fav.
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by EmptyPromise_5 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow really powerful.If you seriously dont have any friends we can be buddies online i guess.This poem is really hard to take in.How old are you kids?If there old enough you should tell them to go somewhere for a night and go out on the town and have some fun without beer.Trust me it well be fun.go to a movie.Right now i feel like crying cause this poem is so much.I feel your pain.I love this poem if i poem can touch someone who cant even go to a bar then obviously its a good one.Best POEM I have ever read seriously.5000 outta 5.
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    Alysun-Lynn
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]


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