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    dots Submission Name: Little Girl Lostdots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLittle Girl Lostdots
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    She sits there, so distant, so sad.
    She tries to hide her pain,
    but her eyes are filled with such sorrow.

    There's insecurity in her stride,
    and fear in her voice.
    Her long, thick hair, she uses as her sheild,
    hangs down to cover her tear-streaked face.

    Before them they may see,
    a girl who's given up,
    someone who doesn't care.
    When I look at her I see a lost soul.

    Behind those sorrow-filled eyes,
    I see a girl who is filled with love.
    A girl who has such determination,
    just not enough support.
    Behind her sheild, under those tears,
    I see beauty.

    I see a heart so big, so pure,
    it brings tears to my eyes.
    My heart aches for this sad, lonely soul.

    I can hear her prayers,
    though she doesn't speak them.
    I can see her fears in her eyes.

    She thinks she can hide all of her pain,
    but our eyes are the windows to our souls.
    And though she speaks nothing,
    her eyes have said it all.

    I watch her, she's quiet.
    I know her mind is an orchestra,
    a marching band if thoughts,
    so loud in her head.

    She looks up at me.
    I see her sad face slowly form into a smile.
    I smile back, and without saying a word,
    I tell her that everything will be alright.
    A tear streams down her face....




    Submitted on 2005-05-23 09:07:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was so beautiful and poignant. For a moment, it felt as if you'd known me your entire life...silly, isn't it? I love that it has that subtle happy ending. Nothing too spectacular or miraculous...just the promise that things will someday be better, not over night, and not easy. This was wonderful. Thank you for sharing. Be well
    ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by nebnim | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, wow.

    Be right back, let me click this "Fav" button. There, I'm back.

    This is incredibly powerful. I love the job you've done of describing this girl.

    "but her eyes are filled with such sorrow."

    "Her long, thick hair, she uses as her sheild,
    hangs down to cover her tear-streaked face."

    "Behind her sheild, under those tears,
    I see beauty."

    "She thinks she can hide all of her pain,
    but our eyes are the windows to our souls.
    And though she speaks nothing,
    her eyes have said it all."

    Damn, I want to quote the entire thing. I feel like I've known this angel for years.


    The last stanza summed the entire thing up incredibly well.

    "She looks up at me.
    I see her sad face slowly form into a smile.
    I smile back, and without saying a word,
    I tell her that everything will be alright."

    A connection is made; a person that cares
    Still.....

    "A tear streams down her face...."

    It will be a long road.


    Thank you SO much,
    Steve




    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]


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