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    dots Submission Name: My Infinite Divisiondots
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    Author: Anniehodgkiss
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 72/47/9
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       motivation: very down on a cold and rainy day. disappointed in myself over a man...again.
    setting: coffee shop.


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    dotsMy Infinite Divisiondots
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    I am both predator and prey,
    warden and prisoner,
    monster and quivering child.
    Absolute division.
    Simultaneously running to
    and from myself;
    Planning my escape while setting traps;
    Conspiring against myself.
    Succeeding and defeating
    unity.




    Submitted on 2005-05-23 13:24:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      hmm. Well, this is a bit different than the last one I read of yours, but different is always a good thing. Still, you have the ability to pick a topic and stay steady with it. You are straight to the point and unwavering. And the topic is an interesting one. I can certainly relate. I too seem to be constantly add odds with myself...pulling in different directions all the time. You capture it well.
    | Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved this. Its paradys where so true. I think that everyone these feelings at one time or another. Some more then other..
    Your wording was nice and was perfect to bring out the emotion in this. It was short but it worked for this piece. Just enought to get the point.. but not soo much that it felt was dragged on. Great write-
    joy
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahh.. this is a lovely use of paradox which shows the infinite battle in us all... there are times when we are brave and wanting to hate everything and others when we are scared and wanting to cling to our securities... This is simplistic but definately gets across your message and does it well, might I add... Thanks for the gracious comments!
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by bonita2689 | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn this is sweet. I love your format and the way you contasted the words, how they never ment the same thing. I really do love this. Im making it a new favorite for sure. Great write.

    Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      I am both predator and prey,
    warden and prisoner,
    monster and quivering child.
    Absolute division.
    Simultaneously running to
    and from myself;
    Planning my escape while setting traps;
    Conspiring against myself.
    Succeeding and defeating
    unity.


    ahhhhhhhhhhh. you nailed the ulimate divsion in human consciousnessness..... these are the undelying forces that keep us up at night... dammmm geeez .


    Simultaneously running to
    and from myself;


    Planning my escape while setting traps;

    dam. thats all I can say. dam dam dam. a fvaorite of mine by far!
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by screams | [ Reply to This ]


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