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    dots Submission Name: Ulturnate Lovedots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    22/F/Edmonton/AB/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.45 - 145/140/109
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1150
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 945



    Description:
       Bout how when you get off of drugs you start to change and realize that your man isnt the kinda guy you want.


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    dotsUlturnate Lovedots
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    Your in love,
    And well i'm not,
    I guess we cant change that,
    Huh.
    I dont kno if i can,
    Mend your heart,
    cause you fell in love,
    right from the start.

    I cant fight not,
    Being Honest.
    Anymore...,
    How many more years,
    Do you want something to on,
    That really isnt anything.

    You love me,
    And im really flatterd,
    But,
    I cant love you the way you want,
    You need a nice girl,
    Who connects with your brain.
    Not one that fights every wave.

    I hope well remain the best of buds,
    Cause thats what we were from the start,
    Drinkin and smokin' buddies.
    Now that wev'e changed together,
    We not what we used to be so lets just be buds.
    Besides we both ulturnatly in love,
    With someone else,
    we just havent met them yet.




    Submitted on 2005-05-23 15:58:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well you are honest and you definitely put the point out there..but i think you should spice it up a bit. put a little more creativity into it. Don't be afraid to add a little more emmotion ..in this case maybe anger. i liked the ending..the only thing tht bugged me. was that you said buds and buddies. i dont know im just weird like that. over all perty cool
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]


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