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    dots Submission Name: Leap of Faithdots

    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLeap of Faithdots

    My heart is growing weak,
    I'm falling, falling so fast.
    This time I can't be saved.
    My strength has floated away,
    I've caved.

    It was a test of faith, I failed.
    A test of strength, my strength.
    It's gone, I've been deserted.
    I'm alone, wide open to heart break.

    Like watching a fire, witnessing the destruction.
    I can feel the heat, I can see the flames,
    cascading before me.
    I know, to get any closer, I'll ge burned.
    Yet, I don't turn.

    My gaze is fixed on the flames,
    The tears stream down down my cheeks.
    The fire intoxicates me, burns my eyes,
    but still, I move closer.

    I know I should turn away,
    run from this horrific rage of flames, but I can't.
    My legs are like stone, so heavy.
    The fire, though a danger to me, is so appealing.

    I move, still closer.
    My skin feels to be melting,
    dripping from my body.

    It is so painful, inside I'm screaming.
    I'm trying to fight the urge, the temptation,
    to plunge into this scorching inferno.

    I'm so compelled, intrigued,
    yet I'm so scared.
    I know the only way to save myself.
    So close to the path of safety,
    though it feels so far away.

    With a deep breath and a prayer of strength,
    I finally take the leap of faith.
    In the eternal flames of love,
    I will forever burn for him....

    Submitted on 2005-05-23 16:16:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow... Woow and more WOW. I absolutley love this poem.However it wouldnt make it to my fav's list or anything.But its good.You have talent i can tell.umm no complaints just praises.i love how you visualize this poem so much.and compair everything. I love love love it.
    10 outta 5
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]

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