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    dots Submission Name: Shadow & Deathdots
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    Author: Elibeth Gensch
    ASL Info:    15/F/Illinois
    Elite Ratio:    1.31 - 1/6/3
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Broken
    Total Views: 241
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    Bytes: 486



    Description:
       I wrote this when I was at Camp Zion in Door County, Wisconsin. I had been depressed for several months, & the speaker at Camp really got to me. Saturday, at breakfast, I just sat down and wrote my heart. This is what came out. It`s about my struggles through the years & on my dependence upon God.


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    Pain. Who likes Pain? Who likes Suffering?
    See? Don`t you see what I`m going through?
    The Shadow`s closing in.
    It seems that I can`t swim out of it.
    So what`s now left to do?

    I`ll follow you
    through Shadow & Death.
    When I can`t see my way through,
    Lord, I`ll follow you.
    I`ll follow you,
    you pull me through.
    You lead me through the darkness.
    Lord, I`ll follow you.
    I`ll follow you.




    Submitted on 2005-05-23 16:49:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good writ,I really like "When I can't see my way through, Lord I'll follow you." I need to remind myself of that more often!
    ~tootles
    | Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by Joybell | [ Reply to This ]
      There is an undertone of desperation in this poem, IMO and I think that comes from the repeated lines of "I'll follow you" as if you, or the writer are screaming out for guidance.

    Nicely done.
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]



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