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    dots Submission Name: House of Insidedots

    Author: Dipsomniac
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 59/70/18
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsHouse of Insidedots

    Rest your head on a black hole
    Pull your thoughts away
    Shivering stars and trembling rainbows
    House of gold, doors of iron
    Gates of sapphire, knobs of steel
    Outside is life

    Seven sins, six days
    Five fingers, four corners
    Three to the Trinity
    Two to a pair
    And one stands alone

    Submitted on 2005-05-23 17:43:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "shivering stars and trembling rainbows"
    that's really freaking brilliant.
    I liked this cuz no matter who is reading it, they can each pick their own meanings and interpretations.
    That makes a good poem in my mind.
    keep em comin

    much love, kris
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by angelfyre | [ Reply to This ]
      this is thick with symbolism and remeniscent of Revelations... the mind is an awesome and frightening place in turns. this gives me some food for thought.
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmmm...let me see. I have to say that this is a write that has no questions but is enlightening the idea of opposite things. I got no "feeling" from this though because of the fact that it went back and forth so much that I figured that you have written a write that is the form of a black hole in words, because it sucked my thoughts away. Nicely done. I think??? Hee-hee. Have a good one.
    | Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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