Raw, Sex in a minute

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Raw, Sex in a minute

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Tongues thrashing Hips smashing Booze splashing Hair pulling Teeth biting Sweat dripping Sweet licking Fingers fucking Cum sucking Son of a bitch You know what I like One night stand Again tonight

Submitted on 2005-05-23 19:03:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Angelic side: oh my gosh *blushes*, this is so nasty... Devilish side: nasty is good lol... but it was over so quick... much like a one-night stand hmm? All jokes aside, this was pretty... vivid and concise. What you wrote here left a lot to the imagination... and I have a very good one lol. Just a slight nitpick: you didn't capitalize the start of every line... lines six to nine. Sorry, just had to point that out. Yea, nicely done. Now I wanna go get some lovin' lol. Peace, Jase

| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]

I think that this was really good. I think that this inspires people to want to go and get laid. Well it did to me. Anyways I loved how simple, yet so complex this was. I would liked to see some more of this. Maybe write different point of views or something. Alyssa

| Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by alcoholcaust | [ Reply to This ]

Short and sweet (especially the licking)! Very erotic - down and dirty. very visual and evocative. Don' t think you left much out :) All banter aside, this was brave and certainly created the erotic effect of the "Fast and Furious" Steve

| Posted on 2005-07-31 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]

Yeah that was a minute for real! LOL Hey, everybody likes quickies sometimes but damn...a minute? LOL This was fast-flow which is great because it reinerates the title of the piece. That's some rough sex too described with that incredible imagery. sweat dripping sweet licking fingers [censored] cum sucking It's Friday! I'm gon get me some of that tonight! X

| Posted on 2005-08-05 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]

Yes, berry, berry graphic indeed. It does capture the mental mindset of one night stands though, because thats all they are "lets get mind altered and just go at it", ya know? But as for me, been there, done that, aint goin' back to it. I think it was very well written and ya done good in expressing that feeling ma dear. Have a good one.

| Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

A bit graphic, but hey, that's what poem's are supposed to be, right? Visual. I see what you have in the way of flow, but I'd suggest breaking it up in lines of 3 or so. Interesting poem! :3

| Posted on 2005-05-23 00:00:00 | by Ajyra | [ Reply to This ]

wow. I like it. It makes me want to do something right now, or should i say someone. Anyways it makes me picture what you were talking about and I am sure that u got a lot of view from this. :) LeAnna

| Posted on 2005-06-11 00:00:00 | by RedRoseofBlood | [ Reply to This ]

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