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She's Just A Girl


Author: Aj
ASL Info:    21/M/MI
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Words: 254
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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She's Just A Girl



she had a "normal" childhood, and school was nothing hard
a brilliant mind who just wanted to find a ticket out of this town
as she grew inside she began to find that school wasn't that great
she left it all, she soon would fall a victim to hellish fate

she'd been disowned by her family
forgotten them, she's been gone four years
she met a man, in the palm of his hand
he promised her the world

he gave her a money bag and a list of business men
when her day is done she feels unloved
she feels alone, and has no friends.
no calls from her family, only guys who want her time.

"another date. you'll participate, they'll pay well for your time."
her pusher man has his plans, but this girl she has her own.
late in the night he says "you'll be fine, I have a full list for you tomorow."
her heart it akes, she lives in pain. her life is full of sorrow

a plan grows inside her head, she wishes she were dead. she won't be alive before the end of this night, this girl will meet her end.
she only wished to find a friend, some one who she could trust
now she's dead, her end was meet. no one knows it but him and us.

the girl on the corner. the girl we never knew.
she meet her end because of him, or was it me and you ?




Submitted on 2004-04-07 00:16:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  whoa...is there an earthquake around here cos this rocked my world. wow, it was so sad...yet so teu i like the lat line when u said: the girl on the corner. the girl we never knew.
she meet her end because of him, or was it me and you ?
| Posted on 2004-04-09 00:00:00 | by Ola | [ Reply to This ]


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