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    dots Submission Name: Old Valentinesdots
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    Author: ShatteredGlass
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 21/26/9
    Words: 246
    Class/Type: Lyrics/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 220
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    Bytes: 1545



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    Girl:| All my love went to waste,
    And still I have yet to face,
    The Fire burning in your eyes,
    It's killing me deep down inside,
    I thought you were more
    But you’ve only made my life sore,
    You're the living hell I set free,
    If only you Loved me

    What Happened to old Valentines?
    The ones who loved and were easy to find?
    I just wanna fly away,
    Maybe then we'll be okay.

    Guy:| I wish I could love you,
    I really do,
    But I'd be livin' a lie,
    I'd be my own alibi,
    Baby,
    I wish you understood,
    But No man could,
    You're just not the one...

    What happened to old Valentines?
    The ones who loved and were easy to find?
    I just wanna fly away,
    Maybe then we'll be okay.

    Girl:| I thought you were my world,
    Man I thought you were my wall,
    But I guess now I know
    A girl like me can't have it all,
    You just missed out on something great,
    For once in my life I was sure someone was my fate.

    What Happened to old Valentines?
    The ones who loved and were easy to find,
    I just wanna fly away,
    Maybe then we'll be okay.

    Guy :| Baby just calm down,
    Wipe away your dramatic frown,
    I know you need me,
    But we just can't be,
    You'll cool and all,
    But I can't
    Not now.




    Submitted on 2005-05-23 23:05:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was really good.It is kind of sad how the guy dissed the girl.I would not want to be in her shoes.But sometimes love is not meant to be but who could know that it would hurt coldly.To make it even worse he even says " I know you need me"Yeah but he doesn't want to be with her.Good poem.
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol, this sounded like some ace of base kind of 90's dance song. (you know that guy with the really deep voice in the background?)
    Thats beside the point, I think you got the message through and did well.
    Good Luck.
    Big bill-
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Big_Bill789 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow...this is great.i really liked this.i love the meaning and how it was written.it was very creative.the way you put in both persons' prespective was what made it different and more interesting to read...good job!

    -AdRiAn
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by black_joker1292 | [ Reply to This ]



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