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    Author: sug90
    ASL Info:    14/F/U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 69/93/34
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 209
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 855



    Description:
       "Love poetry" has always been really hard for me to write so I know that this is pretty typical angst poetry tell me if there is anything i can salvage from it k? Plus, this is for a close freind... who happens to be a girl... *blush*


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    I tried to leave you my heart
    But you just turned away
    It still sits there on the floor
    Rotting away and still I beg for more
    It’s not what you did
    It’s what was never done
    All the times I needed you
    Some comfort, a hug
    You found a way out of it
    As I watched from a distance
    And you comforted her
    I wondered if I love you,
    And what would that mean
    I’ll never be sure
    Although I see it every day,
    Just out of reach,
    I guess I’ll be lucky,
    To be miles away
    So I won’t slip and stare
    And tell you you’re beautiful
    But you have someone to do that
    I’m not surprised at all
    You’re loved by us all
    But I wish I could move on
    So I’ll stop thinking
    “What do you see right here?”




    Submitted on 2005-05-23 23:11:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was pretty good words where simple but the sentences expressed your emotions very well in this piece.well i don't know what else to say hope to hear from you. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by seven11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This has simple flow, short sentences to express deep emotions. I quite liked the innocent uncomplicated love expressed here :)
    Good work! Looking forward reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]



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