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    dots Submission Name: Shedots
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    Author: Big_Bill789
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 329/370/119
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
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    dotsShedots
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    I can taste the bittersweet smell of the flowers blooming outside my window
    I can feel them growing immeasurably
    Like my passion for her
    Every kiss I’ve felt,
    Makes me crave more
    Every time I touch her hand
    I shiver…
    Every day I’ve woken up and stared at her sleeping
    Watching her incessantly
    How can I not…
    She is my love
    She is the blood in my heart
    The color in my eyes
    She is my reason for living
    When I look into her eyes I see nothing but brilliance
    She is brilliant
    She is the reason why the flowers outside my window grow
    My only escape from all the things I need to run away from
    My only true reason to open my eyes when I awake
    She is the life inside me that tells me to carry on
    She is my only…




    Submitted on 2005-05-24 08:47:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the beauty of love, that we can feel and smell and sense all around us. this caught my eye because of the title, for i have a "she" poem too! "my reason for living" seems so co-dependent, but i can understand the meaning here, someone who stirs your very being and makes you feel alive., it is a beautiful gift. thanks for sharing.
    !Cat
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      This was indeed beautiful. I wish someone loved me this way lol. She is real, correct? If so she is so lucky to be loved the way you love her. Great write.

    She is the blood in my heart

    She is my heart is so worn out, I'm glad you put something different here.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      This was beautiful. The wording and the flow were good. This poem was so full of love, I could literally feel how strong your love is for her. You expressed yourself brilliantly! The imagery was great also, I could almost see the love in your eyes when you look at her. I long for someone to love me like that. Beautifully done!
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Geraldine | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this!
    Especially>
    she is the blood in my heart and
    When I look into her eyes I see nothing but brilliance
    She is brilliant

    good write
    keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-06-18 00:00:00 | by bestdeceptions | [ Reply to This ]


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