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    dots Submission Name: The Depths Of My Heartdots

    Author: Ace
    ASL Info:    17/m/In Hell
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 305/337/56
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1243
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       This for mesa moose and she better like it j/k
    you know i loves yeah

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    dotsThe Depths Of My Heartdots

    Torn whole
    Ripped ragged
    The depths of my heart
    Tragic, and jagged
    Frantic as I look for a new
    I look your way
    I love you
    My love is so shallow
    My pain so deep
    Quickly hug me
    Kiss me sweet
    Youíre my joy
    Iím your pride
    Love me hard
    Hate me light
    Iím not your boy
    Not just a toy
    Just the man you can
    Iíve been down
    On the highest day
    Donít hurt me
    Make love not dismay
    Love me the now
    The right way

    Submitted on 2005-05-24 11:07:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really well written
    This write really created powerful imagery
    I also like how you stressed the theme in this write
    Letting it carry this write perfectly and with an even flow
    Nice Work
    Your Friend

    And Thank You for the recent comments
    I am happy you enjoy my writes and know I enjoy yours just as much
    Take Care
    | Posted on 2005-12-14 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      the biggest compliement i have yet to give.But your the first to hear it.And it is tru.I hung on to every word you said in this poem.Your poems are delightful to read.always personal with a twist.i see that you have a optomistic life.which is good to hear.I will enjoy reading more of your poertry.this poem is superb.
    10 outta 5
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by Rainin_Raspbery | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a sweet piece. I'm sure the gal will love it. However, there was nothing in here spectacular to make it a standout piece. Give the readers something to remember in every piece. Something that will make them stop and read it again...Nice job though.

    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm first in line to kick them in the head before Dev, hope you know. I'm at work using the computer, hehe no one will ever know. Gonna miss you this week. Lovin the poem. I'ma mail you yours with the long letter you want. Soon as you get here there will be a hug and a kiss waiting no worries. Lovin the new poem lots and lots with checkers, french fries, frosties, and red bows. My little black heart is waiting.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]
      awwwwwww this is soooo sweet! I love this. Whos torn out your heart? Tell me so I can go over there and beat their ass! lol Me really liked this...Im making it a new favorite!

    Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]

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