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    dots Submission Name: Borndots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsBorndots
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    Every day with you
    I feel born again.
    Like an infant
    absorbing his new environs,
    I feel things
    that my body has not felt before,
    and every commonplace thing
    is beautiful and new.





    Submitted on 2004-04-07 03:29:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a beautiful poem. I really enjoyed your expression. I kinda felt what you were saying. Great job.
    | Posted on 2004-04-08 00:00:00 | by LostInLife | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a wonderful expression of the feeling of love...when all feels fresh and new. Seeing things for the first time because we are seeing them reflected in love's eyes....
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      nice written, you are good at writing short, meaningful poems, I like it, although I would like it even more if it contained some mystery, like a puzzle... it would left me "all the space to colour up" like Suzanne Vega said, it would make more room for interpretation.
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      The piece conveys a newness like no other. Great original piece of work. Keep up the good work. ~Anchiale~
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Anchiale | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this. very comforting tone to it. very simple and easy to follow. no complaints from me.
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Voodoo_Lounge | [ Reply to This ]
      This reads like an affirmation, and it is something that I would almost say to myself every morning with which to greet the new day. Nice, short and sweet piece ^_^
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Transcendancing | [ Reply to This ]
      I appreciate your emotions, but this is not really poetry. Develop the thought, add some rhyme and meter, and then see where it leads you. Poetry is word adventure, go for it!
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      you don't need rhyme. it's good as it is. very nice description of love. but is 'environ' meant to be 'enviroment'?? you know I'm german and I looked in my dictionary cause it could be a english word I don't know but I only found 'enviroment' or 'environs' (only plural). sorry but this time I point out the spelling mistakes.
    | Posted on 2004-04-07 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]


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