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    dots Submission Name: ~~Reflection~~dots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 747
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    Gaze upon the waters
    a reflection
    Truth a mirror
    a protection
    Rippled waves
    of being
    No distorted view
    of seeing
    Here and there
    the same
    From a thought
    the name....

    Submitted on 2005-05-24 13:04:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      simplicity at its finest...leaves you with a feeling of peace and tranquility...I like it allot!
    great "style" change up you've done here...like you've walked through a "door".
    The Tiffspeak is cool, but it's nice to see you set it aside for the sake of giving this poem more "impact" which it has.
    Great job!
    And I hope your wing heals in time for you to fly south for the winter...
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by Deep Ace Thinks | [ Reply to This ]
      You and your river! It took me a little while to figure out the last line, but I think I got it.
    I can see you, Tiff, sitting at the river writing this.
    Very nice, I wouldn't mind a bit more. either...

    Be Happy
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      It's a theme that has been explored like too many times and there's not much more to be said it about it than what has already been said. I think it was really on it's way out after Christina Aguilera and Mulan thing...But you did a nice job with a over worked theme.

    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      I actually like the short phrasing, gives it a simple yet strong voice. It also adds to the quick fleeting moments "no distorted view of seeing" my fave line.
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by childs | [ Reply to This ]
      I like what you've got, but it seems incomplete to me. Maybe you should continue it? Just a thought, it IS your work after all...


    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      great length in line usage in your rhymes, it feels like it should be a little longer, but it kinda keeps you wanting more at the end which is intriuging
    | Posted on 2005-06-14 00:00:00 | by laniejane | [ Reply to This ]

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