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    dots Submission Name: Don't Touchdots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 940
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    Bytes: 879



    Description:
       rant to a guy that thinks he is all that and he go touch any one at any time.Please comment


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    dotsDon't Touchdots
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    Don't touch that clot boy
    your going to be shot boy
    Don't touch your nuts boy
    your not a gangster your just a wanksta.
    Don't touch that girl boy
    Thatís my girl boy
    Don't touch my stack boy
    Hear is fact I ride around in a nic pack steel Cadillac on 34's.
    Bow Down to a white boy that stronger than you.
    Boy, why do you mess with me when Iím tipsy, just because I run everything Westside of Mississippi.

    Don't mess with me boy.
    I flow like Muhammad Ali.
    and spit out rhymes out like ludicrous.
    Watch out for me boy
    I'll have every one switching on you like a switchblade.

    Don't talk boy
    Don't walk boy
    Don't breathe boy
    Don't do anything boy.
    Stay down like the dog you are.




    Submitted on 2005-05-24 19:44:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Umm....Yeah it was okay ..some of those lines are stolen from rap songs though ;) So maybe stick to your own stuff...
    | Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      um... I'm not really into rap and "gangsta" stuff, but I like how you got out some emotion and showed you really felt. other than that I'm not really sure what to say... a few spelling errors, but other than that it was alright.
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by salamander | [ Reply to This ]
      this one is good and it has a flow that is a little weird but it is there, when i was reading this it sounded as though you are very mad and tired of being pushed down by someone who is just like you, wanksta that is some word and Max if you are a wanksta shame on you for letting people put you in a group, i got the picture in my head on a white boy dressed in huge baggy pants that hang down past the ass, shirts that are way to big and hats they are turned upwards, there are a lot of wanstas at my school and to all guys or girls who wear there pants/shorts under their butts stop it i don't like having someones ass in my face when walking up the stairs at school!(I feel better now) good write home-dog!
    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      As I was reading it, I kept hearing it being said as a rap. There are a few spelling mistakes but it adds to the way the narrator speaks. I have trouble relating but it's ok.
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by whiteangelviv | [ Reply to This ]
      Very strange, it had an intresting flow but the over all thing I didn't like that much. I have no idea why, maybe it's just not to my tasts? (and I'm really soundung like a rich snob)
    | Posted on 2005-05-24 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]


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