This poem is very descriptive and makes the pain come to life through words. Especially with the line "Demanding pain from ever inch of our bodies". I also like the line "Drowning in this darkness that surrounds us." Its a great line to start this poem. It sets the atmosphere well. Though I did notice something contradictory. "And hoping for the worst" "And wishing that this were all over" It seems the narrator wants the pain and wants it to be over at the same time. But that is where the line "Crying tears of beautiful confusion" explains this. The narrator is extremely confused. All in all: it was a very interesting poem to read.
Hey there my mexican friends. j/k. Thought I'd see what your up to in writtin. You haven't been online in a while. Well anyways. I thought this was a good poem of yours. Only thing wrong is that you need to add a "y" at the end of everin the 6th line. Other than that it's good. :). Well hope to hear from you soon. bye.