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    dots Submission Name: English Literature Tier Hdots
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    Author: freak_like_me
    ASL Info:    20/female/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    4.81 - 120/118/49
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       I done my eng lit exam today, it was actually ok


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    dotsEnglish Literature Tier Hdots
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    I awoke that morning
    Late
    From a tedious sleep
    The night before

    I gathered myself up
    Pens, uniform and my
    own collection of vivid
    memory and knowledge

    Precede forth, I...to the bus stop
    Panick struck, in the casual thought of being
    Late
    Not I, the bus arrives at exactly 9

    To theatre of Lecture
    No. "Retreat year 12 to the Assembly"
    Two desks each
    To separate the distinction between each grade

    Tier H
    It reads on my paper
    Vibes tell me that the classmates
    Sit, dwelling in their own anxiety
    Strange, when it's all done
    It was only a fearless piece of a tree

    Just another extension of seconday worries




    Submitted on 2005-05-25 12:50:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the spartan imagery here...very reflective of high school. i myself did not attend my own classes very frequently, back then one could get on the roster of her friends' classes just by showing up when a substitute teacher was teaching. i went to three different highschools that way and one college, course i never got credit for those classes i went to because i wasn't really enrolled in them, but it was ever so much fun.
    | Posted on 2005-05-27 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      Very interesting take on...finals...right? I love the line about gathering up your own colloection of vivid memories and knowledge. That sums it up with a very eloquent style. It is very original indeed.
    Yes, vibes are alive in a room meant for finals, and it's interesting that you captured this thought in the poem, but even better, I think that you were very clever to refer to the test as a fearless piece of tree. The paper renamed, and portrayed as fearless in contrast to your own trepidation. very nice. and the last sentence was a very good place to finish. The sentence iteslf acts as a period to the poem, giving a final thought as a firm and final word. Very clever.
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by Anniehodgkiss | [ Reply to This ]


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