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    dots Submission Name: Fallingdots
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    Author: Aryeeka
    ASL Info:    15/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 30/43/19
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Falling, falling into life and I can't take it,
    These words are all I have,
    The simplicity of a crystal so pure and absent.
    No residue to hide everything within.
    What you see is what you get, taking chances with no regrets.
    So profound and undreamed, falsely accused of a life without meaning.
    Despair and hatred, a bed full of lies.
    Misused for everything I've got, of everything inside.
    Just wanted a chance, to prove everyone wrong,
    Instead of singing my sad little song.
    A chance was not given, just what you pretend.
    The words you say, make it all a mistake.
    Forsaking dreams of loves heart embrace.
    It all stands still, everything gone bad, nothing could replace the thing that we had.
    It was all fake,
    And I'm falling, falling into a life where I can't make it,
    'Cause you were all I had.




    Submitted on 2005-05-25 15:17:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seems that the girl in the poem is trying to say that without him she can not make it .That is sad .but through the sadnesss this poem was not that bad.It was still good even though it was talking about sadness.Good write.
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]


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