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    dots Submission Name: Tears Of Firedots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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    dotsTears Of Firedots
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    Her eyes are daggers,
    a force not to be reckin' with.
    The redness of rage colors her iris,
    anger protrudes from her stare.

    If looks could kill,
    he'd have already been dead.
    The assailant of her mutilated heart,
    the victim of her fatal glare.

    The tears of fire roll down her face,
    leaving an ashen trail of flesh on her cheeks.

    She's not shedding a tear for him,
    but for the person she almost was,
    the person she would have become,
    had she not given him her soul.




    Submitted on 2005-05-25 15:17:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      What would the world be like without men, or should I call them boys...all they do is make girls hurt and the ones who don't make us hurt are either gay or soon-to-be priests! If looks could kill I'm sure there would be a lot of dead people around. I like the poem. It's better to vent than to let the opposite sex have the upper hand.
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by mandycandygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Geraldine! Hi! I really liked you poem. I do wish that looks could kill, because i just want to...Grrr! It was a beautiful poem.
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by ShatteredGlass | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a good one. It was like if she never would of given him her soul then she would have happiness instead of going through hell.
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really really great! You covered all the bases of hate and really put a picture to the words. I would love to be critical and say something was wrong with this, but really honestly i can't find anything I hate. I just think it all goes so well. Every stanza flows to the other. It's a great topic and I think you did it justice too.
    Cheers,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]


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