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    dots Submission Name: Fruit Basketsdots
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    Author: Big_Bill789
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 329/370/119
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       You get a fruit basket on your grave when you die, or something to that extent. I wrote this a ways back in 9th grade so it's not the best.
    Just try to figure it out :)


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    dotsFruit Basketsdots
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    I saw death so long ago
    He told me that, I should know
    I was next
    I would be hexed
    Yet I wondered.
    I asked him what he had meant,
    He said I had not sent
    A lovely fruit basket,
    Which now lie on my casket

    I sleep life eternal
    But not yet infernal,
    You see the big man above,
    Has made me a dove
    So now I fly happy,
    Fruit baskets about.

    No visits from death,
    Not even a breath
    But if I do see him,
    Iíll tell him too look
    Right down below
    Thereís baskets for took
    Just try one my friend,
    A berry or three
    Youíll see why we love them,
    For Death is the key




    Submitted on 2005-05-25 15:18:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a good poem but I do not get the death and the fruit basket coming together as one.Could you please explain this to me.Thanks.
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]


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