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    dots Submission Name: My Angeldots
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    Author: Samuel Bielz
    ASL Info:    21/M/CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 151/182/46
    Words: 381
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Description:
       This is a somewhat spiritual poem, but I like it. I wrote it for my friend Marisa......Oh, And when I reference christians in this poem.....I used quotes for a reason..... It has 2 dialogs.


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    dotsMy Angeldots
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    Treading in this black abyss of hopelessness
    I can't see the path before my feet
    I sweep this branch back and forth before me
    To keep myself from tripping and falling
    Deeper into this blackness

    I hear these demons taunting my spirit
    They're growling like a pack of wild dogs
    I gradually sense them surrounding me
    Are they plotting my slaughter?
    Am I going to die here?

    I suddenly feel the vile splatter of saliva
    My guiding stick has been torn from my hands
    I freeze like a ghost in my footsteps
    And I tremble like a hill on a faultline
    What is to become of me here?

    Now, unable to see where to go
    Shall I wander in an attempt to find my way?
    Shall I remain hear until I perish?
    My God, Can I still find you from here?
    Or shall I rot in Hell?

    Wait! I hear the soft sound of an angel's steps
    The sweet caress of a gentle touch
    The comforting sound of a heavenly voice
    Have you come to shame me?
    Have you come to condem me?

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    You took my hand and guided me
    I was blind and you gave me sight
    You are the only person who's shown me truth
    You enlightened me to the love of God
    You helped me mend my pouring wounds

    Not like the churches, which shun the weak
    Not like the "Christians" who Judge the fallen
    Not like the Hypocrites, who decieve the needy
    But you were like Christ, and showed your heart
    You gave me my life back.

    Pushed away from the love of God
    By those who claim to be perfect
    I fell into my black abyss away from Christ
    If perfection was God's requirement
    To hell with me than

    Than there was you, my angel
    You showed me who God is
    You showed me his love
    I learned from you of his mercy
    And I regave him my soul

    You say you don't know what God wants
    You haven't found your calling yet
    Let me tell you just one thing baby
    If you were anywhere else
    Other than where I met you
    I may never have found my way...
    You're my angel.




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      wow... Sam, this is amazing, im not a christian at all but i really like this poem. i really dont know what to say except that i can relate to this piece in some ways but either way i think that this poem is very well written and thought out. great job hun keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Sam! An excellent piece for sure! I'm a Christian myself (my dad is a Baptist minister) and I understand exactly where you are coming from. I'm not dissing God at all, I serve him with all my heart, but all these heretics and hypocrites who claim they are perfect and judge others, when we're all equal in God's eyes. I may tell all my friends about my faith, but I have never once judged them for their beliefs, or told them I had the answers to everything, and knew the only way for things to be done. You've captured this sentiment very well. I love this piece, keep on writing!

    ~Jen~
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by Jengrr | [ Reply to This ]
      that is a beautiful poem. I often feel that way. I can relate to it becuase my friends often say i am lost because i don't believe in christ. I am just trying to find my way. I wish i could find my angel. my favorite part was "Pushed away from the love of God
    By those who claim to be perfect
    I fell into my black abyss away from Christ
    If perfection was God's requirement
    To hell with me than"
    Excelent writing! keep it up!
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by ShatteredGlass | [ Reply to This ]



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