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    dots Submission Name: Heartachedots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsHeartachedots
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    Pain is consuming me,
    squeezing the breath right out of me.

    The lump in my throat,
    has grown into a stone,
    blocking my airway,
    making it hard for me to swallow.

    The sound of your voice,
    and the words you didn't say,
    caused a down pour of tears,
    that are flooding all of my thoughts.

    My heart feels so sad.
    I can feel it beating slower,
    slower, like it is going to just stop.
    If I'm quiet enough,
    I think I can actually hear my heart weaping,
    breaking for you.

    My body is so heavy,
    I have no strength left in me.
    The sadness has layed upon me,
    like a blanket.

    Nothing left to do now but to lay my head
    down on my pillow of heartache,
    and cry for you until my tears run dry.




    Submitted on 2005-05-25 17:22:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah, deep, dark depression. I think it's good 2 get these feelings out, deal with them & move on.
    Nothing wrong with feeling like this.
    Love,Peace,Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. your poem is great. I know that sounddss lame but its true. yopur imagery of your heart, just, dying, of sadness and heartache was reall good. I liked it. dont change a thing!
    | Posted on 2005-06-12 00:00:00 | by livinginacoma | [ Reply to This ]


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