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    dots Submission Name: I want to get awaydots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 694
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    Bytes: 636



    Description:
       I used line from lenny kravitz

    "Oh....I want to get away
    I want to fly away!"

    so just to tell u before you read it


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    dotsI want to get awaydots
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    I wish that I could fly
    Into the night sky
    So very high
    and not come down from this cloud
    Just like a dragonfly

    I'd fly above the greenest trees
    Over the bluest seas in all differnet degrees
    To anywhere I please

    Oh....I want to get away
    O so far away
    I want to fly away

    I wish I could fly away
    From the all pain
    Away from all these stains
    That I left behind with that knife
    That knife that tried to take my life.

    Oh....I want to get away
    O so far away
    I want to fly away!




    Submitted on 2005-05-25 17:28:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it has a good message, but some parts seem kind of random. I really liked the idea of it, but it kind of flowed and was kind of random. I don't know, maybe it's just me...
    | Posted on 2005-05-25 00:00:00 | by salamander | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it, the flow is good there are no spelling errors, and yes we all want to get away from our life once and a while but in the end we like things just the way it is, because once you start something that you like you won't stop and then that becomes your life so no matter how hard you try you return to it, and for you it's a knife(not good but that's your choice I'm not going to yell at you like i could because i've done it to a few of my friends so feel really lucky) But there is a lot of the feeling of want escape coming through this poem and my fav. lines are
    "I wish I could fly away
    From the all pain
    Away from all these stains
    That I left behind with that knife
    That knife that tried to take my life"
    just because it tells what you want to do and why.
    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]


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