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    dots Submission Name: The one who love you moredots
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    Author: muhammed
    ASL Info:    23/male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 87/124/111
    Words: 390
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 328
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 2273



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    dotsThe one who love you moredots
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    Sherry can you tell me what's wrong?
    why are your words so short so cold,

    you know that you can't leave me,
    even if you try...

    I'm in your lips trembling -
    when you said those lies,
    I'm in every tear
    that you now cry,
    you just can say, goodbye,

    I'm in every breath you take
    in every move you make

    you know that you can't live alone
    you are not that strong

    and I surround you in the wind's flow,
    down in the grass grow,
    up in the sky blue,

    I'm that rose
    that smiles to you,
    when it lay her Head to die,
    out side your window...

    I'm what you ask in your pray,
    my name is the word you long to say,
    I've been the loneliness,
    in the loneliness night you ever spent,
    I'm the song that will never end.


    when you are lost,
    just follow your heart
    and you will find the way,
    if you are afraid of darkness,
    look into my eyes..
    and you will see the day.

    Oh ..
    how you can think of walking a way,
    Shush ,don't say a word,
    I know what you wanna say,
    just put your head in my breast,
    I softly move my hand in your hair,
    just close your eyes...
    it will fall all the sadness and discussed.

    sherry can you tell my what's wrong,
    when you are in arms of the one
    who loves;
    every enoch of your skin,
    adore even the earth you walking in,
    and take you with every breath,
    and breath you out..
    a song to sing.

    someone his life and death,
    his dreams and his every breath,
    are just for you.

    you are with me,
    but you have been,
    now, and always free...
    so if you really want to go ...go
    but deep down I&#8217'm sure you know,
    even if you are in the end of the world,
    with the kings of earth,
    some day you will leave all,
    and come back for,
    the one who love you more.




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      this is really good it feels like it is full of emotions . thats always great when you are a writer. also you have a very great way or wording the things that you are trying to say. so keep writting and i waill always read
    yours truly
    kaila
    | Posted on 2006-03-26 00:00:00 | by Kaila Turley | [ Reply to This ]
      not bad. I think that need to add more feeling to the poem. I also think that you have a great pint think you.
    | Posted on 2006-03-22 00:00:00 | by joseher | [ Reply to This ]
      that is beautiful, and its amazing that someone could write half as well as you, there would be no hate in the world, i know its an exagerasion, but not a very big one.
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]


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