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    dots Submission Name: Haikudots
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    Author: Big_Bill789
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 329/370/119
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Haiku/
    Total Views: 858
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 361



    Description:
       I wrote this just to write a haiku, but it turned out beautifully. And by the way you hecklers, this is a chain haiku, a series of haiku developed into one. Don't scream the rules at me again. I know them well


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    dotsHaikudots
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    a slow melody
    drifting along horizon
    flying beyond me

    trees are withering
    sand combs the forever tide
    unable to speak

    great mountains ahead
    longing for images past
    this journey unfeigned

    lilacs grow beside
    laying in a field of gold
    and wishing for more




    Submitted on 2005-05-26 08:33:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      great combination of haikus. they flow together well enough to become either a poem or a series of haikus. i'll agree with thinkingofyou-these DO bring Washington to mind. Reminds me of the hike through the north cascades i did last week. and of the mountain meadow above my house. great write.
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Dark_Dancer | [ Reply to This ]
      umm... first of all THIS ISN'T A HAIKU... sorry. Bill, a haiku is 3 lines, only 3. with syllables of 5-7-5. that is all a haiku is. Anyway, your write was good for a poem if that is waht you would call this. so yeah remember what a haiku is. THNX

    - Nammy
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Namlooc20 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this was sooo beautiful. It reminds me of life back in Washington. When I used to go up to the mountians and see the lilacs growing in tall feilds and wishing I could stay forever. My grandmother writes haikus and she loves to write about things so simple like this, It really did remind me of her. I havnt seen her for s really long time. Well Im making this a new favorite I must say. Thankyou for writing somthing so beautiful and sharing it with the world like this. Im putting it on my wall if u dont mind, I think I might paint it there, Ill be sure to put you pin name there. Unless you'd like me to put your real name, and in that case you could jsut e-mail it to me through here. And once again, a beautiful peice of work. Amazing!

    Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      But when a haiku is this good, who cares if its a haiku, right? One of my favourites of yours so far - 'lilacs grow beside
    laying in a field of gold
    and wishing for more'
    Beautiful. I also like the part:
    'a slow melody
    drifting along horizon
    flying beyond me
    trees are withering
    sand combs the forever tide
    unable to speak
    great mountains ahead
    longing for images past
    this journey unfeigned'

    Well done. You're on my exclusive list.
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Von Django | [ Reply to This ]


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