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    dots Submission Name: Buried Emotionsdots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 570
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 616



    Description:
       In my opinion, this is not my best work, it probably should have been a poem, it was just some thoughts that were going through my head.


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    dotsBuried Emotionsdots
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    If the hate is so strong,
    how does love seep through?
    If only anger is visible,
    doesn't that make it true?

    If the desire for love,
    is buried so deep inside,
    then how is it able to resurface,
    why is it so hard to hide?

    The outer shell is thick,
    made up of heartache and pain.
    But there must be some unseen leaks,
    cause the love is leaving a stain.

    The dark, hardened layer,
    is now tainted with sweet sin.
    The walls of protection are caving,
    and temptation is making it's way in.




    Submitted on 2005-05-26 16:41:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      THIS WAS REALLY CREATIVE. I LIKED THE WAY YOU ORGANIZED IT WITH A GREAT POINT OF VIEW. YOUR EFFORT WAS REALLY GOOD. GOOD JOB !
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by J-IDENTITY | [ Reply to This ]
      this peice flowed really well, and its pretty straight forward- asking questions probly everyone has asked at one time. for some reason this just didnt capture my attention..and i found that i had to force myself to keep reading. i think the topics ok but you should add some things to it to spice it up.
    | Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by brokensmile | [ Reply to This ]


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