To be...Or not to be... HAPPY by Brack-Attax

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Author:	Brack-Attax
ASL Info:	21/male/phx
Elite Ratio:	6.53 - 175/116/21
Words:	135

Class/Type:	Poetry/Happy
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Have a happy tear!:) :( ?

To be...Or not to be... HAPPY dots

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Happiness to an extent,
with the smile on her face.
The sun rising on the other side
of the glaring glass.
Being able to see the start of a new
day brings her happiness.

She sits in the chair she is confined to.
Just a day ago she was walking in the
light of the rising sun...

And now once again the sun is rising,
which brings her happiness.

Tears fall from her eye, of happiness, or of hurt?
The muscles in her legs move no more.
The sun is rising,
which brings her happiness.

A whisper enters the air,
"Thank you Lord" and again,
"Thank you Lord."
which brings her happiness.

To be.. Or not to be... HAPPY?

Submitted on 2005-05-26 17:00:04 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I think this is sweet. And to be or not to be happy, I suppose it just depends on the situation at hand.

Happiness is a tricky thing, too much can make one insane, too little and you have the same effects. I choose to be in the middle, it seems to be less destructive.

Rain
| Posted on 2005-06-25 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  To all other readers, This is Brack-Attax, the auther. I revised this writing. To better understanding I hope. The last line is a question for you all to answer aswell as the women depiicted.

Thanx
| Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Brack-Attax | [ Reply to This ]
  This ends with a good question, but who is ever guaranteed any specific degree of happiness? She has reason to be sad, yet still finds some joy in life, and I'm sure will find more.

I greatly appreciate the "thank you Lord" giving her happiness, because I think it's evident she still has a lot to live for and probably came close to losing her life in whatever happened to her legs.

"Happiness to an extent" is a beautiful opening line and could have been used as the title.

These are only philosophical comments, the poem is excellent, and thought provoking.

Thanks,
Lloyd
| Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
  Umm... I think this poem has potential, meaning phrases like this:

And now once again the sun is rising,
which brings her happiness.

Make all the difference.

but i don't really get the first stanza:
"Happiness to an extent,
with the smile on her face."
- does that mean that some of her happiness is gone, so it is only partially happiness?
&
"The sun rising on the other side
of the glaring glass,"
- what do you mean by glaring glass? Is it just how she sees the sun rising through the window?
"which brings her happiness."

Those are just a few questions. Besides that, the emotion of the poem is deeply felt, and so i have almost no words for it, because i obviously can't describe it. :-.

One last thing: Why did you make the last line so different from others? Could it be that every day becomes more and more monotonous that even the sun cannot bring enough happiness? so here would be such a question as to whether there is a point to living like this? And if it is so, then why is happy "HAPPY?"

Anyways,
i must have bothered you enough. =
But
good luck!
~Alina
| Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Ms. DejFruit | [ Reply to This ]
  awww...i like this poem.
through out the whole thing i was picturing a sun and a girl smiling.
a veri interesting title that caught my eyes to read this poem!
good job mikeyyy!
hahahahha
a question that ends the poem is always a good thing...it leaves a thought.

-fearless
| Posted on 2005-08-07 00:00:00 | by Fearless | [ Reply to This ]
  I think there's a lot of potential here; the underlying image is creative and very powerful. I think half the talent is having something to say.

This one was a bit repetitive for my uncultured taste. I think if you eliminated some of the
"The sun is rising,
which brings her happiness."
It might come together better.

Keep up the good work,
Steve
| Posted on 2005-06-03 00:00:00 | by Lost Sheep | [ Reply to This ]

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