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Dry Tears


Author: Enleigh
ASL Info:    16/f/WI
Elite Ratio:    2.32 - 21 /32 /13
Words: 194
Class/Type: Poetry /Cutting or Mutilation
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Dry Tears



I will allways cut my wrist,
before I ever cry
Crying is a sign of helplessness,
my tears will allways run dry

People ask me why,
but in the moment I never say
I would rather fall over and die,
then tell them that my mind is grey

If my tears come down,
I'm letting them win
Not one of them frown,
but yet a twisted grin

My phsical pain cancels my emotional pain
It's my way out
It's the only thing that will keep me sane
In this world of hate and dought

Please dont ask me to stop,
because I never will
This is all I got,
to keep me going up the never ending hill

So when you ask me why I cut myself,
It's because my tears will run dry
So I'll make you ask yourself,
why would you ever cry?




Submitted on 2005-05-26 18:01:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  slight spelling mistake-its 'physical'.

Ok word wise and rhyme wise, I quite like this, and I like this notion of 'dry tears'.
but I must discuss my view on this topic with you, as I myself cut, which Im very ashamed of, but I have stopped for so long since I started writing and posting on this site. I have 'weaned' myself off it, so to speak lol, so I can tell you I'm sure you can find a way to stop too. Im just saying.

I know wat it feels like, the satisfaction and calmness, it is indeed a strange sort of high. but really, why were tears created? it is not a sign of weakness. I think of tear ducts the same way I think about excretion or pissing lol. you have to go to the toilet right? if you dont it'll well up and blow you apart hahah..
so to provide for our emotional state, we have tear ducts to outlet water, that sort of relieves the tension, the welling up of too many emotions/pain, it is our nature, and we shouldnt be ashamaed of it.

I think the act of crying tears has just become overrated and turned into a disgusting cliché. its a normal bodily function really. its what we are SUPPOSED to do. its HEALTHY.
and writing, writing is also a HEALTHY way to outlet these emotions, as I've discovered.
but cutting into ourselves physically, well thats the wrong sort of high. I hope that answers your poem's question. I quite liked your word usage, I am sorry that you're in this pain, I'm also in pain most of the time, but I havent cut for a long time, and I think Im winning the battle. I hope you will too.
Its not something that is good. Having ugly scars on your wrist. stop attacking your skin, and use your natural bodily function-tear ducts. or use your writing, you are a great writer, and I hope you can go beyond this overexhausted cliché.

thanks for the read. sorry for going on.
much love
alexis
| Posted on 2005-05-29 00:00:00 | by pennyroyal tea | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it, its rather interesting... in a good way. Its really good and it flowed real well.
People ask me why,
but in the moment I never say
I would rather fall over and die,
then tell them that my mind is grey
that was in my opinion the best line.

good job! : )
| Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by salamander | [ Reply to This ]
  woW THIS IS... Im not sure i cant find the words to describe the feeling it brought to me.
I can tell how you feel though and im sorry if its actually about you.
Star
| Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Star | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a depressing, yet interesting poem. I like how it rhymes, but flows well at the same time. It actually describes my own state of mind at some moments in life. I don't really understand the line "This is all I got,
to keep me going up the never ending hill". It doesn't seem to make sense. My favorite line is "Crying is a sign of helplessness,
my tears will allways run dry" Clever title. Overall: very effective and clear
| Posted on 2005-05-26 00:00:00 | by Benjamin Marr | [ Reply to This ]


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